100 WC

The room was shrouded in darkness.

Only a dim candle’s light faintly glowed on the corner table, creating a slight aura of warmth.

To most children, this would be enough to scare ‘the monsters’ away. But Thomas wasn’t fooled so easily. He knew the truth.

The Boogeyman.

The monster.

Wasn’t afraid of anything.

No matter what he told his parents, they would tell him, “It’s just your imagination, don’t worry.” But they were wrong. Each night the demon would torture Thomas with fear. Once darkness came, a sick game began.

Just like tonight.

As the flame flickered and then went out, Thomas knew the beast was here.

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4 Responses to 100 WC

  1. Daniel says:

    great story well done your story reminds me when my cousin’s room went on fire

  2. Mr G, Sheffield, UK (Team 100WC) says:

    What a suspenseful tale Kai. You’ve used a number of devices to good effect here. The opening sentence was short and sharp, but immediately set the scene. In this context, the other brief sentences were equally powerful. I particularly enjoyed ‘Only a dim candle’s light faintly glowed…’ – beautifully composed.
    Well done and keep rising to the Challenge. I’ll be recommending your post for this week’s Showcase 🙂

    • 16kaim says:

      I am glad that you enjoyed my story, I tried my best to make it suspensful. I am amazed I managed it well enough to impress you, thank you for recommending me for the showcase.

  3. Leanne Maddocks says:

    Fantastic story Kai! You have really thought about your word choices to build the tension. I’d love to hear what happens next.
    Mum
    🙂

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